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Stargate Destiny
« on: Thu Sep 1 2011, 18:49 »

Thousands of years ago, a race known as the Ancients ruled over the galaxy. They built many beautiful cities and outposts on hundreds of worlds across the galaxy. Their technology was rivaled by none. And then, they disappeared. They ascended to another plane of existence, rules in place to ban any interference with the lower beings.

However, one group remained behind. One group that believed their knowledge and wealth should be shared with the less fortunate. One group that was eventually driven out of the Milky Way to seek refuge in a far off galaxy. One group that would hold the key to rebuilding everything.

The year is 2013 and the galaxy is complete ruins. For more than a decade, a small selection of the finest scientists and soldiers Earth has to offer, have been fighting against insurmountable odds against the most evil and dangerous the galaxy (and even other galaxies) have to offer. When the smoke finally settled and the last clichéd, over the top, poorly dressed bad guy was defeated all eyes turned to Earth.

The child of mankind, spread across the stars after being kidnapped from Earth millennia ago, turned to their liberators and their parents for help rebuilding their worlds and their lives. This was a task we weren't prepared for.

Key information regarding a benevolent group of Ancients is discovered and an expedition is mounted to find them, to gain their help. This expedition is to the Orion galaxy, a galaxy occupied by the Malecathi, a race with a vendetta against the Ancients and all related to them. This is the story of the USAF Destiny and her brave men and women.

About Stargate Destiny

Stargate Destiny was originally released on the 17th of January 2006 and completed it's first season run on the 14th of November 2006 with 20 episodes. Unfortunately the crew drifted apart during the early production of Season 2. For the past several years Aaron Percival has slowly been working at re-editing the pilot episode to fit into the changed Stargate continuity and be better read over all. Due to Stargate Destiny being most of the crew's early ventures into script writing some of the earlier episodes were rough.

Season 1 has been re-edited and is now going to be re-released so it fits into the Stargate universe better and to be more enjoyable reads. This will be complete re-writes of some episodes and minor changes to others. All the episodes will fit into the continuity as of Stargate Continuum and the final episode of Stargate Atlantis. We will not be trying to fit our continuity around Stargate Universe. This is not a slight at the show, just down to ease of writing our own show. We consider Stargate Destiny to be an alternate timeline or universe to Universe.

The crew are all big fans of Stargate and it's our desire to contribute to the franchise, even if it's only through fan productions, that drives us during the production of this series.

The intention with Stargate Destiny is to bring a level of seriousness, similar to the early days of Stargate Atlantis, back to the franchise. However, it is also important to maintain the almost family-like bond between the characters of Stargate SG-1. The series will be interconnected with story and character elements always being moved forward and played off of.

Stargate Destiny & Stargate Universe

As previously mentioned Stargate Destiny was released in 2006, a long time before Stargate Universe was ever announced and there are several small similarities which the production crew didn't miss. The biggest similarities are that both shows are based on a ship and both are named the Destiny. We did consider renaming the ship and the show but ultimately decided not to since we came first.

Other similarities are both our Stargates use white chevrons and our taglines are slightly similar. Ours being "Where Will Your Destiny Lead You?" and Universe's being "Where Will Destiny Lead You?" Stargate Destiny was also envisioned to be slightly darker than SG-1 and Atlantis but not to the levels that Universe is.

Characters/Cast

Lt. Colonel Alexandra Hemmingway



Hemmingway is XO of the Destiny and CO of the flagship off-ship exploration team, Orion-1. Hemmingway was once left stranded in a damaged F302 after the battle with the Super-Hive (SG Atlantis finale) and almost died as her oxygen rapidly ran out. After her recovery, she requested transfer to a frontline SG unit, determined to be in a position where she could prevent situations that would put the lives of her fellow officers in situations like she found herself in. Hemmingway is slightly sterner than the likes of O'Neill or Sheppard but it's all for the good of her team and the crew of the Destiny.

Brigd. General Peter Barrows



Peter Barrows is a distinguished general in the military and he has always been determined to get involved with the Stargate Program. He was passed over for command of the SGC several times due to political reasons but when General O'Neill offers him the chance to command his own spaceship, Barrows jumps at the chance. Bit is he ready for this challenge? The complete isolation of being the only Earth vessel in another dangerous galaxy. Can he handle the pressure?

Commander Tenyris Nalar



*** Information is classified. Please see appendix #1, 1x01/02 - Providence.

Jonas Quinn



Jonas Quinn once participated in the Stargate Program as a member of SG-1 but returned to his home planet. He returns to the Earth after his planet starts to recover from the Ori occupation. However, he returns with dark secrets and a horrible past that he is now trying to make up for. He is constantly determined to never let a life end or to ensure that it is never in vain. He is fighting to reclaim that innocence he once had. He is extremely knowledgeable in history and the sciences and it is these services that secured his placement on the Destiny. Jonas has the ability to learn much faster than the average human and his thirst for knowledge is second to none.

Lieutenant Takeshi Hasewaga



Despite his young age, Takeshi played a crucial role in the development and construction of the Destiny. He is now also the ships main engineering officer. He always has a smile on his face, a joke in mind and a comment on his lips. He's also very eager to share Earth culture (especially movies) with Tenyris and his people. Give him an elastic band, some chewing gum and a paper clip and Takeshi will keep the Destiny running just from that. He is a very proficient engineer with technological knowledge of many races.

Secondary Characters

Major Jake Williams - Played by Anthony Montgomery
Dr Elizabeth Lancaster - Played by Laura Harris
Dr Telari/Sek'vesh - Played by Gary Dourdan
Major Nick Connors - Played by Desmond Harrington
Lieutenant Morgami Onnotal - Played by Erik King

Season One

1x01/2 - Providence
The Destiny expedition is launched when a discovery points to a group of benevolent Ancients in the far off Orion galaxy. There they find a galaxy full of terror and an enemy intent on destroying anything related to the Ancients. Please read our pilot episode here >>
1x03 - Familiaris Incendia
Having retrieved a Stargate for off-ship exploration, Orion-1 is forced to handle a dire situation when a UAV crashes into a friendly village and kills several town people. However, the inhabitants of the village misconstrue this accident as an attack and respond with their own unique ability.
1x04 - Behemoth
An F-308 patrol returns under fire to the Destiny after encountering a massive vessel in the middle of the sector. Soon, the same vessel attacks the Destiny, and the ship is forced to flee into the system's asteroid field, where she is disabled, with the massive vessel bearing down on her.

Additionally Imagery


USAF Destiny, early WIP CG image.


Layout of the Destiny.


F-308, final concept art.


Swarm fighter, basic Paint design.

DON'T LOOK AT UNTIL ACT NINE

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« Last Edit: Sun Oct 9 2011, 15:10 by Vaughn »


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Re: Stargate Destiny
« Reply #1 on: Thu Sep 1 2011, 19:31 »
132 pages !!!!!

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Re: Stargate Destiny [PILOT SEASON ENTRANT]
« Reply #2 on: Thu Sep 1 2011, 19:35 »
It's a 2 parter. My usual lengths tend to be 60-70 pages. This is down from almost 180 when Geoff first wrote it.
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Re: Stargate Destiny [PILOT SEASON ENTRANT]
« Reply #3 on: Thu Sep 1 2011, 19:38 »
:laugh: I'll probably read it in two sittings. What's the halfway point?

Anyway, we're allowing this in, but this is a one-off. NO MORE LATE ENTRIES. We were feeling generous as this was completed before time.

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Re: Stargate Destiny [PILOT SEASON ENTRANT]
« Reply #4 on: Thu Sep 1 2011, 19:40 »
The end of Act 5 is the end of Part 1.

And thank you, I appreciate it.
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Re: Stargate Destiny [PILOT SEASON ENTRANT]
« Reply #5 on: Thu Sep 1 2011, 21:18 »
For a moment I got mixed up and thought this was Stargate: Horizon - a series I read a couple of back, back, back in the day. But I need a Stargate Fix.

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Re: Stargate Destiny [PILOT SEASON ENTRANT]
« Reply #6 on: Thu Sep 1 2011, 21:34 »
Yes, we were fans of Horizon too. Without Horizon we would never have done Destiny. I think our first season originally aired alongside their second. Geoff had put us in their continuity originally which I've removed all trace of for the re-release. I really enjoyed Horizon. We're just awaiting their final season.

I hope Providence proves to be a good enough fix for you.
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Re: Stargate Destiny [PILOT SEASON ENTRANT]
« Reply #7 on: Sat Sep 3 2011, 13:05 »
The Two-Part Pilot was really enjoyable. nice to see you keeping up stargate tradition with General O'Neill and Dr. Jackson making Cameo Appearances. the Malecathi seem like a formidable enemy. nice character development between the main characters and secondary characters.

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Re: Stargate Destiny [PILOT SEASON ENTRANT]
« Reply #8 on: Wed Sep 21 2011, 16:54 »
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Re: Stargate Destiny [PILOT SEASON ENTRANT]
« Reply #9 on: Fri Sep 23 2011, 17:00 »
Aaron, I just want to reply to something you said in the other thread:

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That's why the first act contains plenty of action to get people interested

Action does not get people interested, in and of itself. ESPECIALLY when you're throwing out endless amounts of terminology that most people wont get. Even I struggled with some references (I had to Google 2 or 3 times), and I've seen every single episode.

When action works it's because it's interesting, or unique, or easy to follow, or we get to know an empathetic character quickly so that their immediate danger ropes us in (or all of the above, if you're real good). See: Afterlife.

I actually really hate pilots that start with out of context action.

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Re: Stargate Destiny [PILOT SEASON ENTRANT]
« Reply #10 on: Fri Sep 23 2011, 17:17 »
Seconded. The long action beat at the beginning that kicked this off ultimately proved to be meaningless to the reader - it doesn't feature any of the characters we're going to be following in the series, the stakes are unclear and the terminology of who's fighting who was just confusing. So what we're left with is the description of a CGI dogfight, and without context it's meaningless.
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